don't editorialize so much in "Introductions"

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+++ b/content/2016/introductions.md
@@ -6,10 +6,10 @@ Category: fiction
 
 "Pleased to meet you," she says.
 
-"Pleased to meet you," I say. "You're very tall," I add awkwardly.
+"Pleased to meet you," I say. "You're very tall," I add.
 
 "Thanks, I get that a lot," she says. "What's your shirt about?"
 
-I look down at myself, to be reminded to my chagrin that today is the day I chose to wear my new custom "LATE-ONSET GENDER DYSPHORIA IN MALES IS NOT AN INTERSEX CONDITION, YOU LYING BASTARDS" T-shirt.
+I look down at myself, to be reminded that today is the day I chose to wear my new custom "LATE-ONSET GENDER DYSPHORIA IN MALES IS NOT AN INTERSEX CONDITION, YOU LYING BASTARDS" T-shirt.
 
 "Oh, that's the name of my favorite rock group," I say. "They're from Canada. You probably haven't heard of them."